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fallen ashes
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I will
lie awake, alone
while miles of moonlit ocean
lap peacefully at distant shores; separating
us, and
you are lost in quiescent dreaming.

I will
cherish worthless keepsakes
sediment
on the beach of time, made precious
by remembered moments
quiet insignificant conversations
which you
let fall by the wayside, as you
swept along with life's blithe current
leaving me behind.

And I will
think of you,
silhouetted in sunlit morning,
smiling
dark shadows at your feet, creeping
higher to consume this memory.
and a swift tattoo accompaniment, rapping
out this harsh reality
that you
have forgotten me.

will I?


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volantis, June 2002
:iconvolantis:
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Given 2002-09-19
The poet volantis begins by writing, "I will" and ends with "will I? in this wonderful poem, "fallen ashes"? In between are words like, "moonlit ocean lap peacefully at distant shores; separating us..." volantis' poetry will always caress and sometimes knead the emotions. Although this poem is one of longing and regret, it also, as does all of his poetry, contain tremendous beauty. (Selected by +jsenn) ( Featured by °jsenn )
:iconvivzy:
love the phrases you used there!
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:iconsabriel:
That was touching. There was a great deal of good imagery....I must compliment your great skill.
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:iconroses:
*quietly holds back tears*

That was simple beautiful.... eloquently written....
and filled with such emotion that my own poems can't even come close to capturing....

Wonderful....
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:icontseia:
This is a great poem, some great phrases in there. I especially like "made precious by remembered moments
quiet insignificant conversations
which you
let fall by the wayside" - very true, I think. Well written +fav
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:iconjaysin:
definitely love the second stanza...
great poem, wonderful words


















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:iconsummerdies:
Wow...I love the metaphors and the way they enhance the already liquid flow. Awash with melancholy images which are vivid in both there beauty and depth of emotion.

"I will
cherish worthless keepsakes
sediment
on the beach of time, made precious
by remembered moments
quiet insignificant conversations
which you
let fall by the wayside, as you
swept along with life's blithe current
leaving me behind."

Beautiful!
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:iconeuphoria:
Welcome to my artistwatch. Your work touches my heart.
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:iconsgawevad:
Another very solid piece...you certainly have a way of capturing the reader...your poetry ends leaving me wanting...so on to the next post in your gallery! (I'm having so much fun...hmm..."fun" is such a surface word....I need a deeper descriptor...).
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:icontechnodepth:
great stuff.

love the way this is written.....it really moves in a powerful way.

8) (Cool)
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