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What a beautifully complexly imagined free flow of thoughts in words. Incredibly well described!
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i have to weigh in on the side of jesusbite on this one. i liked where you were going and what you did with it, but the sheer volume of descriptors and adjectives overwhelmed me. that's just a matter of personal taste, i suppose. other than that one issue, very well crafted. you never stray from what you are conveying.